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At one instant I thought about what I should write. I picked up the pen and wondered why. Should I write a letter to you? or perhaps a poem? Should I try to write a song for you? oh no! I don't wanna write another love song again. Their just so cliche. At least that's what I say. But yet I did. I couldn't help myself. Even Though I tried. I'll Open up myself this one time.
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I~ love you.
I~ swear it's all true.
I couldn't lie to you, while looking into your eyes, so blue.
I love you.
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The sky is beautiful. I wish I was here with you. I want to kiss you again.
There are places to see! Places to be!. and yet I always want to, end up with you.
And once again I ask myself, what brought me here? Hadn't seen you in three years. Long legs? blue eyes? Killer thighs? The scent of your hair?
Your intelligence? Or the way you make me smile?
And I can only think of one reason. I think you know it to.
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'Cos I~ love you. You know I do.
I~love you. I swear that to you.
I~ love you, under this sky blue.
I love you.
We all know I do.
I miss you, I hope you miss me to.
'Cos I love you. (i love you)
I love you.
I love you.
Under this sky blue.
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Hiya!
First, songs about love have been done before. There are so many that it's practically its own genre, and a lot of it is unoriginal, like yours. What can you contribute that's going to wow me? Right now, it's not a whole lot.
Also, you seemed a bit confused as to whether you wanted to write a song about love or a song about blue skies. They're not connected very well, so give them something deeper.
Hope this helps, and good luck!
-Elinor